I'm trying to redefine my form and not stay so orthogonal. My previous attempts were too cubic, but not well executed. Hopefully I can pull some useful stuff out of this section. I like reading a lot into it, but fear that when I re draw it I will simplify it too much and loose some of its possibilities.
The thumbnail of this is really cool. I think it could use some simplifying actually, just to give it some definite thickness and establish 'what actually is.' It's already pretty diagram-y, which is awesome. Maybe do a once-over that's more of a literal section, that probably gets simplified, and then go over it with the language you already have here. I think that'll give you more of an idea of what this is actually doing. Don't get me wrong, I think this is really cool, it just looks like you haven't committed to what direction you're taking it in.
ReplyDeleteThat's good criticism. It looks like there are a lot of spatial possibilities (spaces seem differentiated with tonal values) but the section appears to deal more with the spatial experiences and lighting conditions (this is cool). Maybe you should print it out and hand-draw over it.
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